Monday, October 22, 2007

Monday Poetry Train #7

How's this for a funny little poem I found in my files.

Concrete Designs on Things Less Tangible

spring cleaning for ghosts of past lovers

my sword of Damocles

we are all fragile vases containing the same big air

the news headline at breakfast:

trade made for player to be named at a later date

(1999)


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8 comments:

gautami tripathy said...

The third line is marvellous.

I was kind of lost in the poem, short though it is.

Lisa Andel said...

The last line made the poem for me. Still has me chuckling a little.

Vicki said...

The first and third lines are my favorites. :)

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

Yeah, nothing like the world of sports to bring us back down to Earth, huh?

Danika / OpenChannel said...

Hi Gautami - the whole thing kinda tickled me a bit. I kind of remember writing it. I know exactly what it is about, but others might not get it.

Lisa - yeah, it was, as Susan said, a sports reference. I had never heard that phrase before and I thought it was amusing. Here, it's mirroring the idea of getting a new lover.

Hi Vicki! Thanks!

Susan, exactly, which is where the title comes from, to give tangibility to things like love and loss.

Anne Douglas said...

I liked this - it's short and succinct and makes it's point nicely :)

Ann said...

Very cool. Short and to the point. :)

Danika / OpenChannel said...

Thanks Anne and Ann.

Poetry's power is in its density, I think.